T4+Critical+Response+Reflection

My Writing is called 'It Used to be Green Once'

It is a Critical Response to a Short Story written by Patricia Grace

I wrote it as an example of how to critically respond to a character in a story.

One of my learning goals was to analyse a character from a short story and give evidence from the text to support my judgements and comments about the character.

I achieved this because I wrote a critical response showing the charactor traits of mum and backed it up with evidence from the textt


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==== This is a well written Critical Response. You have clearly identified different character traits that represent 'Mum' and given evidence from the text to back up your judgements. The paragraphs are well sequenced and ideas are linked to main idea in paragraph. There has been good attention made with spelling and punctuation. Remember to include a summary paragraph e.g. I enjoyed reading ... Mum made me ... ====

In the short story It used to be green once by Anthony Dodunski an interesting character was Mum.

One of my favorite personality traits of Mum was how you could never really tell if she was joking or being serious. You can tell this by the things she said to her children like in the part of the story when Mum had cut out togs from old clothes and one of the daughters didn’t want to go to school, she said “Get up off that road, my girl. There’s nothing wrong with those togs. I didn’t have any togs when i was a kid and i had to swim in my nothings!!” This also showed that she was very resourceful

Mum was one of those people that didn’t really care what other people thought. She just wore whatever she wanted even if it was ugly like her sun hat that she continued to wear still when she got rich. She went screeching down the street yelling to all her relatives when she went grocery shopping and even though her new car had proper working breaks she would toot her horn so everyone would let her through.

Mum was pretty cheeky and I know this because when her child was sitting on the ground not wanting to go to school she screeched at her from the top of the street about how when she was young she had nothing to swim in but her nothings.

Mum was a very caring person and I know this because she makes her children go to school and gets them out of bed every morning. Another reason I know she is caring is because she yells at her relatives to see if they want a ride to go grocery shopping and brings they’re grocery’s back. She continued to do this even when she was rich, that shows how she’s always caring no matter what.

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